剛剛從展會回來，想抓緊時間客戶。由于第一次參展，跟蹤?quán)]件不知道怎樣寫比較好，希望大家能給我點意見加以。以下是我寫的：
dear mr.xx ,
i was so honor to meet you in hk mega show part 1, thank you for your visiting.

first of all , please let me introduce ourselves , our company specialize in this field for 10 years with the strength of outdoor umbrella,golf umbrella,gift umbrella,etc... we view your website carefully,and he much interested to bulid business relationship with you.

next email,i will send the detail information of umbrella which you asked in our booth.

any comment by return are much appriciated.

thanks and best regards
sampo


網(wǎng)友回答：這么多語法錯誤，這種情況要是發(fā)生在我們公司，老早要被掉了。First of all , please let me introduce ourselves , our company specialize[->specializes] in this field for 10 years with the strength[strength是力量的意思，你肯定想表達specialized in producing xxx] of outdoor umbrella,golf umbrella,gift umbrella,etc... We view your website carefully啥意思？,and he much interested[much和interested不能連用, a lot of interest還差不多] to bulid business relationship with you.

網(wǎng)友回答：確實太長了感覺8樓的不錯，簡潔明了

網(wǎng)友回答：Hello*** Very glad to meet you in the fair.The following is the quotion of the item you selected.Please be note. If anything please feel free to let me know. Thanks.

網(wǎng)友回答：標題： Group Photo 客戶 with 我們 on FICHi, ***, How are you doing???This is ** from ***.Glad to get your name card from FIC fair. Regarding the ***products your selected on the fair, glad to be informed that's our strong products! We are one of the biggest*** manufacturer and exporter in China.（優(yōu)勢）If you want know more about us or our products, pls revert me!Thanks&Best regards,Sincerely,JimOther Info. FYI--------------------------------------------------------------------

網(wǎng)友回答：好的，謝謝你。~~~

網(wǎng)友回答：I think your customer he the more interest on your product and your advantage than your introduce

網(wǎng)友回答：其實，你應該直接說明你們在香港展會上見過面，客人詢過你的產(chǎn)品事宜，然后再介紹你公司，這樣一來，我想客人會比較愿意看下去，而你一介紹自己的公司，我個人認為比較像是推銷信~~另外，論壇上好像都有類似的帖子，你可以搜搜~

網(wǎng)友回答：感覺你寫的已經(jīng)很好嘍、、、、、、、呵呵

網(wǎng)友回答：為什么都沒人理我。。。********5